Negative Space

No desert is as sere
as empty space. Why do you weep?
This crossing is not free.

It never was; not free,
not without cost. You wander sere
and barren galaxies; I weep

and wonder, did they weep,
the stars, when spacetime set them free
to wander skies so sere?

Too sere, my heart. Love, weep no more: fly free.


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16 responses to “Negative Space

  1. Jennifer G. Knoblock

    I love the spareness of this, how it fits the subject. Also the playing with meanings of “space.”

    • 🙂 Thank you! This one percolated for about three weeks before I could shape it. Some bits fell together on their own, and others I really had to work for.

  2. “…did they weep, the stars…” Beautifully sorrowful.

  3. “Too sere, my heart. Love, weep no more: fly free.” The way you weave the emotions and words together is just beautiful.

  4. Oh, you perked my interest in the tritina. Never heard of the form until now. I’ll have to try it out myself. http://goo.gl/K9fTpT

    • I love them almost as much as I love sonnets! Give one a try and bring it to yeah write! Nab: tritina a don’t need to be iambic like this; I just have a thing for iambs.

  5. ^^she’s an iambiphile. Love the image of stars being separated from each other.

  6. I have learnt something new today, tritina. Thanks.

  7. “Why do you weep? This crossing is not free. It never was…” Too often we forget that the very best adventures in our lives cost something. The most enjoyed lives are those spent in adventures for which the cost is recovered as we enjoy the journey. This is a powerful reminder to me to keep enjoying the adventure, and accepting the costs as I pay them. It’s worth it! Thank you for sharing this.

  8. Beautiful! Oh how I’ve missed tritinas. Love your use of “sere.”

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