We lay on the grass counting stars, each flicker a tick on the measure of time. In the space between breaths I took your hand. You lifted your face toward mine. The heavens calculated the insignificance and the significance of this moment.

23 responses to “Math

  1. this is breathtakingly beautiful

  2. Stunning. I love the last line.

  3. So beautifully written…reminded me of some amazing novels I’ve read where the beauty lies in how the message is conveyed…

  4. Superb! Every line was poetic.

  5. In the space between breaths. This, was way too good.

  6. This was comforting to read. Exquisitely crafted. 🙂

  7. Those tiny moments can be the most significant to some, but lost in vastness too. I like how your captured the subtlety of the moment.

  8. Ooooh, the pivotal moment that decides your future. Always loved timey-wimey stuff. You have a fan!

  9. KymmInBarcelona

    The space in between breaths : )

  10. This was so lovely. What a great capture of an important moment in a relationship. Made me feel like I was there.

  11. Jennifer G. Knoblock

    Beautifully done, as always. The last line is perfect.

  12. gorgeous and smart

  13. Your Math is so peaceful. Wonderful.

  14. Absolute perfection. What’s not to love?!

  15. You have a true gift….you are able to evoke such emotion through your words….the type of emotion that a reader feels when the words have been so exquisite that they are almost tangible….like the senses get involved in the reading because of how you have utilized words. Powerful talent!!

  16. I love the way this flows so gently, yet meaningfully.

  17. These are the most intimate 42 words I’ve read in a while, Christine. Your choice of details made this moment delicate and tangible. Wonderful.

  18. Nate’s mention of intimacy is right on target. Really gorgeous writing, Christine.

  19. It seems that every word is in the right place, calculated perfectly for the desired effect, but yet natural. This is beautiful.

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  21. there is a no calculating the moment, when the axis shifts and your hand rests in one that is made to enfold it. I loved it, of course I did, because it’s full of so much love and magic.

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