Fist

We still have time, I know, to light the signal, to shake our fists in final defiance. This is my calling — my call. I strike the last match and watch it burn down.


This post was made in response to the Trifecta Writing Challenge weekend prompt, in which the editors asked for exactly thirty-three words written in first person narrative.

37 responses to “Fist

  1. I love that this broad challenge has welcomed so many different narratives.

    I really like the brutal finality of this. Well written. 🙂

  2. Oh, I love this! So visceral and so well written. Great use of the prompt!

  3. Strike up the Rage Against The Machine!

    I like the muscularity of this and that final sentence is great.

    • Thanks, Lance! You know, reading through all the lovely comments on my piece, I’m realizing that my intent didn’t quite come through. She didn’t actually light that signal fire – she let the match burn out. Which I suppose is a kind of defiance in and of itself. And goes to show how choosing the wrong word can change the entire piece. I should have written “I strike the last match and watch it flicker out,” or “burn out.”

  4. “Watch it burn down.” I love that. It could apply to so many things. Great one!

  5. Defiance! Rebellion! All words that spring to mind when reading your story. Nice job creating something that would cause such an instantaneous reaction. 🙂

    • Thanks! I love that I provoked a response! 🙂 Only, I was actually going a little more for “betrayal,” as in, “I should have lit the fire, but instead I let the last match burn out.” Oh, well, just goes to show that what you intend and what people read can be two different things.

  6. kymminbarcelona

    The power of a gesture.

  7. wow. annbennett2.blogspot.com

  8. Final defiance yeeeeah!!! (: Love this piece.

    • Thanks, Draug! Only, I didn’t quite capture what I was trying to say. Defiance, yes, but she didn’t actually light that fire. She gave up, or betrayed the folks depending on her.

  9. Powerful! The final line says it all!

  10. Wow!I could feel the power rippling underneath-great piece:-)

  11. I love the pent up expression here !!!

  12. not only is this a first person narrative, it has a wonderful sense of power and the feeling of “me, myself and I”.

  13. Instead of going down fighting you have risen to the call with your prompt. Well done.

  14. Life is nothing without something to stand up for, something to rally for or against.

    I loved the voice and the strength in it.

    • Thank you, Kir. I think my intent got lost in my word choice. I saw her as actually giving up – letting the match burn out. Which may be a small act of defiance on its own, of course.

  15. I love this! I think most of us have felt this way at one time or another…
    As a newbie, I thank you for your nice welcome, too!

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