Thrice

When we were eight, I pulled your hair.

I rotated in your orbit, one satellite among all the others. I bore their reflected brilliance until, at last, I drifted away, caught in the gravity of time. Entropy at work, or inevitability.

But the stars were so bright, the heavens clear on the night you found me. I let you weep your loss on my shoulder. I let you stroke my hair.

Ah, love, need I say it? You, only you, always you.


This post was written in response to the 33rd Trifecta Writing Challenge  prompt:

Write a 33-333 word response to the following quote: “What I tell you three times is true.” by Lewis Carroll. You do not have to use the actual quote in your response, but you may if you wish.

I am lying in bed next to the one who inspired the last line, though the details were improvised. I had grand plans of completing the full trifecta of challenges, but alas, time got away from me. I have no photo, and barely a title, but I couldn’t pass up the 33rd prompt.

10 responses to “Thrice

  1. I thought this beautiful..

  2. The ache here of someone who admits at last to love, true love (twue wuv) is so beautiful.

  3. Glad you didn’t miss posting for this prompt at least because it is great. I love how it starts with the first line. I love the two lines starting with “I let you…” and I love the you, only you, always you. Reminds me of me & my husband. 🙂

  4. Gorgeous. Brilliant and beautiful use of words. I love it.

  5. the last line was beautiful. the first line made me lightly chuckle. it always seems to start that way. haha

  6. Entropy and inevitability and love.
    And of course the marvelous one who inspired you. Much love to you both from all the way over here.

    • Aww, you’re a sweetie. 🙂 You know the ironic thing? I realized last night that she doesn’t actually read any of these. And this isn’t even the first I’ve written with her in mind!

  7. Wow. The two references to hair are phenomenal pairings. My favorites are the opening line and this:

    “I let you weep your loss on my shoulder. I let you stroke my hair.”

  8. Love the ending. This whole piece has that brilliance.

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